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July 2, 2009
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I could stand here forever alone in this rain
Counting the cloudbursts  that fell over me
Arctic,  Trickling down my spine.


I had this dream ,
That We faded in..’ chasing cranes
You’d count them each time they hit the floor’
And just stare  as if a part of you had fallen apart.
(Always the Gray ones. )
I would hold your hand so tight, because I was afraid you would Really fall apart.

There we were, standing with fallen cranes.

After a while they turned black;

                                            And You’d fade away.

I’d close my eyes and pretend you were still there
See, I could never find you through these tears.


I’ve imagined the way you would.
You’d wrap your arms around my mind,

You felt so warm,  
                                   Strange and beautiful.

You’d kissed my neck, I kissed your fingertips.

It’s The way your eyes smiled,  as you fell asleep.


I can’t find, Forever in your eyes…

                                      I should leave while they are dry.

When Paper cranes are fading in around you,
you wont be the one to fade away this time.

I could never really say it, but i think you should know that

                                     I think you're amazing
An incomplete piece of poetry.

Perhaps I have a failed career in fictional love poem writing.
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CLanez Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2009
beautiful... your words leave me in awe...
inkteardrops Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2009  Student
oh my! i think you must be in my head! just waiting and lurking and bringing about distant memories and emotions I've long forgotten!
your words are brilliant my dear!
always leave me at the edge of my seat ..(literally)
wow... amazing!
olipus Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2009
My English is very weak. dictionary has helped me understand the importance of individual words. Every word touching me a lot. more and more and more. Now I cry a little but it is nothing, right?
merm-ish Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2009
I realize that this is incomplete- but nonetheless this is very beautiful! I can't wait to read it when you've finished the whole thing:D
myheartsong Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2009
When did you write this?? It evokes a lot of dormant memories and feelings for me. You always know how to speak my heart, even when you're not trying to...
bohemianpoets Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
i wrote it thursday night.. round 2am.

your comments always makes me smile miss, as ive always told you :heart:
myheartsong Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2009
As usual, it reminds me of myself. :) It's uncanny how you speak my mind, when it's coming from yours.

I almost wrote tonight...instead, I took the journal that has all of my letters in it to him, and just drew my feelings...just abstract art that reflected my mind. Maybe one day I'll put those thoughts into words...maybe it will be this eloquent.
CatchMe-22 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2009
stunning... captures the feeling of the vulnerability and uncertainty in love perfectly. Really reminds me of a poem I wrote an age ago for someone I was once very fond of: [link]

Hope ur well!
EternalFallacy Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer

This is truly wonderful, it made me so dreamy. I love the original way of composing the visual part of this poem.
gothiktenkasen Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2009  Hobbyist
Broken hearts sing the best love songs.

Writing "in love" as "inlove", as a one word action (because that's what is really is) makes this so much more.

I can feel everything you're saying.

I love the rhythm of this. You do such a good job. Chin up, mon ami.
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